User:Inge Hoonte/cage cave: Difference between revisions

Revision as of 14:43, 25 January 2012

I'm hiding in a cave
With a man with dark hair
His appearance flickers, in motion
Shape shifting between    v  and   g
                        Cave and Cage
                        Nick, Nicolas, and John
                        the singer, the actor, the artist
                                                          (and back again)
 

Their faces blend together
Three tongues moving at jet speed
Six eyes working with thirty-six teeth
Some nose hair, saliva, and too many feet 
For their dirty, thirty fingers to meet
A unibrow
In unison


The saddest, most tranquil, exciting, and all-encompassing live radio composition car chase kissing scene 
concert unfolds as they perform movies, movements, songs, poems, and the improvised holes between them. 
There's no recording. I left them, playing in the cave.

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   Six eyes working with thirty-six teeth
   Some nose hair, saliva, and too many feet
-  For their dirty, thirty fingers to eat
+  For their dirty, thirty fingers to meet
   A unibrow
   In unison
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   The saddest, most tranquil, exciting, and all-encompassing live radio composition car chase kissing scene
   concert unfolds as they perform movies, movements, songs, poems, and the improvised holes between them.
-  There's no recording. I left it in the cave.
+  There's no recording. I left them, playing in the cave.
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-alternate endings
- There's no recording. It only exists in the cave.
- There's no recording. It's in the cave.
-                       I left them in the cave.
-it = should refer to moment, not recording. them = cave/cage.
-implied that this experience can't leave the cave. it's only there.