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In general; certain sentences remain a bit vague to me.. Maybe sometimes explaining in a simple way | In general; certain sentences remain a bit vague to me.. Maybe sometimes explaining in a simple way would make the text more readable for noob like me ;) | ||
Why: A more personal p.o.v. in this part of the text would be nice :) | Why: A more personal p.o.v. in this part of the text would be nice :) | ||
Revision as of 13:43, 21 September 2017
Ocean->- In what:
Where do i see the led lights? What is the sound i hear?
Why: The work draws from the idea of abiogenesis, or the emergence of primitive life, evoking the turbulent and sometimes violent emergence of life from the depths of a primal ocean into living forms -> maybe nice to know this in what.. Like Ocean's is an immersive installation that draws from the idea of ..... etc.
ReSource What: The work explores the limits of recycling: if new forms and spaces can be created out of recycled material, can content be recycled and given new meaning? This such a good sentence! Maybe push i further up? From there i'm happy to read anything..!
How: What kind of magazines did you use (and maybe further; how does that relate to the content? Where are you as a maker in the story?) More descriptive maybe about the first word and how it works and the outcome ...?
Error View In general; certain sentences remain a bit vague to me.. Maybe sometimes explaining in a simple way would make the text more readable for noob like me ;)
Why: A more personal p.o.v. in this part of the text would be nice :)