User talk:Giulla/Graduation Proposal GdG

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Andre Castro (talk) 11:46, 27 November 2017 (CET) General comments on the proposal.

  • There is a imbalance between how much you define the game and actual experiments, and experience of games. You need to bring the practice onto it, make the reader excited about the prospect of this game. Providing many details, when the foundation of the game is not presented clear and in action is not helpful. It tends to cloud more than clarify.
  • In the relation to the previous practice you are not telling how your previous projects relate to the current project