Project proposal Yalou

Version number 1

Feedback by Steve

Things to do> work on this intro. A series of short film pieces

using the family archive with particular attention to my grandmother's music; (which in one piecve will be performed by will performed by members of the family.

My grandmother's presence is alive to this day. The project works with an archive that shows the story of my grandmother; how one generation influences another (in this case passing a world view down the generations), through acts of repetition which are expressed in the piece through repetition in behaviour and through repetition of visual traits).

[It works well to bring the reader back to the field, to situate the reader in your imaginative space. It is great that the text is in the mode of address of a memoir. I like the way it unfolds, but the beggining needs to be tighter.

The proposal is a very practical document so in the first few sentences the reader will get a good idea of what you propose. The current draft is thin on material information at the start, where it is most useful. Please answer these questions

What will you project be? Is it a film? An instillation? (one sentence)

What will it be made of? Found footage? Archive material? (one sentence) If so, what archive material?(one sentence)

Why have you chosen this material? (one sentence)

Will there be a text with the film? What form will this take? (one sentence)

What part does your grandmother's music play in the proposed piece? (one sentence)

What do you want to do with the soundtrack? (one sentence)

Answering these questions at the beginning helps the reader understand what you want to do (I know these elements are covered later in the proposal in some detail, but they need to be at the front). Once we know this your motivation makes sense so the proposal can continue in a more "poetic" fashion:]

Yalou's reaction on the feedback of Steve

After the past week(s) It has become much more clear what direction I want to go into. And I sure agree that the intro needs to be short and clear!

> A series of short film pieces still sounds amazing to me, but I am also interested in the documentary as 1 film. So maybe I will have space and time to do both. The most important aspect of the film is dat there is a clear narrative and that the viewer can connect to this narrative.

> The music of my grandmother is still as important as it was, and I am trying to think of a way how that can be a more clear narrative. And how this element is also visible as the voice of the film.

> The repetition and the generational passing is still a strong element in the work. I do want to specify this more, as I have been thinking about it a lot. In my first text on practice and in many conversations I speak often about her presence now a day. This feeling of her presence is a connection to this generational passing and this repetition but I also feel that it has a lot to do with generational trauma. A new subject in my work, but one that has already been visible for a long time. So the generational trauma connects to this repetition and this passing through generations.

> My project proposal will start with a clear and short introduction, where I will answer the following questions: