User:Thijshijsijsjss/Human Parser/Notes for a Second Reader

Dear [second reader],

Thank you in advance for reading the thesis draft for my project Human Parser! Currently, it exists as a collection of wiki links. Please find them all here. Though ultimately this thesis is not intended to be read in one particular fixed order, for now I recommend reading the different entries from top to bottom:

I have a few comments to make:

///// format of this thesis
My graduation project is a text-adventure game with an accompanying game manual. The thesis consists of annotations to this manual. Originally, this was meant to be read while playing the game -- encountering annotations as you play, not reading through it in one fixed linear order. The nature of the game is changing, and I'm not sure if it still works to read the thesis this way. For now, I have attached a dummy manual (1 of 3 manuals used in a recent playtest) with markers to the annotations. I don't expect (nor intend for) you to read the thesis this way, but felt like it was good context to add. Now that it's a potential subject of change, it feels extra relevant to mention this, and any feedback on this would be very valuable! For now, I would recommend reading them from top to bottom.

///// my own comments in the texts
I'm writing on the wiki, and use different collors for different notes to myself and [my supervisor]. These are not part of the thesis. For some unwritten sections, these notes might give you an idea about what I hope to write there (and thus hopefully filling in some gaps in your reading experience of the unfinished text). Also note that the selection of sections now is not necessarily exhaustive: I still have some wiggle room in the word count to add (or change) sections. Again, feedback on this (e.g. whether there are glaring gaps from your POV) would be valuable!

///// the feedback I will receive
My understanding is that your feedback will be a ~500 word reflection. I'm not sure where I would receive this, but I wanted to indicate that (even though I work on the wiki) my preference for feedback is a private communication channel like mail or in a document, not an edit to any of these pages!

I'm very curious about what you'll have to say! Also, I would've preferred to have been able to hand you a clearner draft (with fewer comments and all in one place maybe), but this has not been possible for me these weeks. I hope you can pierce through the sprawling web of pages. If there's any problem or unclarity, please let me know :)

Thanks again,

Thijs